I’m happy to do that, but I’ll need the article text. Please paste it here (you can send it in parts if it’s long), and tell me if you want a specific tone (formal, conversational, journalistic) or word-count target.
While you share it, here’s how I’ll revise:
– Mix sentence lengths and voices: alternate short punchy lines with longer, flowing ones; blend active and passive where it reads naturally.
– Replace sentences that start with “This” by rephrasing the subject or using varied openings (e.g., “Such a result,” “The finding,” “In turn,” “As a consequence,” “What follows,” “It” when clear).
– Swap “Besides that” and “Therefore” with more natural transitions. If you want the exact ones you mentioned, I’ll use “Then this,” “What’s interesting too,” and “Well, here it is.” Otherwise I can vary with “Also,” “Beyond that,” “As a result,” “So,” “In turn,” etc.
– Vary paragraph openings so no two consecutive paragraphs begin with the same word or structure.
Quick sample of the kind of changes you’ll see:
– Original: This experiment shows a significant increase in efficiency. Besides that, the team discovered a secondary effect. Therefore, future studies should expand the sample size.
– Revise: The experiment shows a significant jump in efficiency. What’s interesting too, the team uncovered a secondary effect. Well, here it is: future studies should expand the sample size.
– Original: This suggests that adoption will be slow. This is confirmed by survey data.
– Revise: Such evidence suggests adoption will be slow. Survey data confirms it.
– Original: The team analyzed 2,000 records over six months.
– Revise: Over six months, 2,000 records were analyzed by the team—then the outliers were checked manually. The core pattern stands.
Send the article when ready, and I’ll deliver a clean rewrite with those adjustments.